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Critique this please!!

Sun May 3, 2009, 10:20 AM
  • Mood: Hopeless
  • Listening to: L's theme
i wrote this in about 30 minutes this morning.

As I sit,thinking, waiting for the time to come.
I think to myself, Why is this happening? What have we done?

Tears fall, and as they hit the ground
people scream, and gangs run around.

Storms wrath, and as they tear apart cities,
a new music is echoing, only to make your ears bleed.

Red pigments stain the landscape that
used to be so green.

People come up with inventive ways for destructive
things.

The Penguins chatter, and the Polar Bears roar
one last time, and they are heard no more.

Karma bites and the world falls,
this is how she ends it all........................

Did you like it?
now COMMENT ON IT!!!!!

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  • Current Residence: loganville, georgia
  • Favourite movie: FINDING NEMO!!!!!!!!!
  • Favourite band or musician: LMS Band
  • Favourite genre of music: everything!!(except rap, rap isnt music its talking)
  • Favourite artist: Alternate-Dimension and Lorili
  • Favourite poet or writer: Alternate-Dimension and Lorili
  • Favourite style of art: is music a style of art??
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Comments


:iconalternate-dimension:
*screams* SCHOOL'S OUT!!! TIS SNOWING!!! WOOOOOO!!!! *throws snowballs at teachers*

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:iconalternate-dimension:
HEY.
YOU.
did u ever get wolf?

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~:heart:Hold a true friend with both hands:heart:~
:iconalternate-dimension:
HIIII Collin :3 'tis Katie if you're that clueless :XD:

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~:heart:Hold a true friend with both hands:heart:~
:iconc011in-the-great:
woww nice avatar.lol

ummmmm........supp

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Collin!(^.-)!---- We are all dots on the map of nowhere.
:iconalternate-dimension:
nothin'...IMA STILL GONNA EAT U >:U

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~:heart:Hold a true friend with both hands:heart:~
:iconc011in-the-great:
ok..............

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Collin!(^.-)!---- We are all dots on the map of nowhere.
:iconalternate-dimension:
why didn't u go to school tewdae?

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~:heart:Hold a true friend with both hands:heart:~
:iconbluegreengrey:
Thanks for the fave on Calvin and Hobbes :) Hope you have a great time on deviantART!

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Three cheers for flea-bitten mongrels like us!
:iconraimeiuta:
This is Collin? =D
Lol, I must watch you then. XD

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.: so sweet I can hardly speak :.

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